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The Truth About Private Schools, Demoralization, and Modern-Day Conspicuous Consumption Looking around at Marylawn and similar institutions, one will notice a vast population of unhappy children, the products of brainwashed parents who needlessly throw their money away on an “education”. How educated can these children get if their parents raise them to think that private schools are “the best” way to go and that those commoners who attend public school will be so much worse off. This is a lie perpetuated by private schools themselves in order to secure much needed (but undeserved) funds. Parents from every income level pay their hard-earned money to give their children something that they can get anywhere because private schools are supposed to have a better and more moral social environment, supposed to be safer, supposed to make the students smarter... What a crock! Private schools are bad for the soul. They are corrupt. They are total waste of money. Why send your children to a private school when they can get an equal, or even better, education at a public school? The people who are lured into registering their children for a school like Marylawn are enticed by glittering generalities and empty words. If there really were something special to be gained from attending a private school, what does that say about school systems and the world in general? Is there some secret key to learning to be picked up at Marylawn, of all places? If there is, then that is a shame because knowledge should be freely available to everyone, not hoarded and only given to those who can afford to be a part of this elite club of private school kids. Attending private school does not give a person anything, except maybe a feeling of being privileged. The only thing private school provides is a topic of conversation when, somewhere down the road, you meet others who have been as “fortunate” as you were to go to a “great” private school. As Marylawn has been the example so far, the practices of this school that teaches “Catholic” values will now be highlighted: cheating people out of their money and discrimination against certain students on the part of the teachers. Not to mention the conflicts between the teachers themselves: bad politics and backbiting to stay on top. And THEN we are forced to pray every morning. I think that is the epitome of hypocrisy: a place where the values of Jesus are the regular mantra, yet one can often run into the antichrist in the school on any given day. Catholic schools nowadays are still on the same wavelength with pre-Reformation Catholic institutions where corruption was rampant and the na?ve believers were the victims. Why should people be forced to do things like attend church sessions of a religion that they do not even identify with and apply the principles of the Holy Bible to their own lives when they are not Christians and take sexual education classes taught by nuns? As stated on the school website, “The mission of Marylawn of the Oranges Academy is to prepare, motivate, and challenge young women, intellectually and morally, to assume their roles in society according to Catholic tradition and in the founding spirit of the Sisters of Charity of New Jersey.” Does Marylawn actually do this? The consensus of the unlucky students is a resounding NO! Private schools do nothing for the children that go there except fill their heads with antiquated ideas and cause them to get less Christmas presents because their parents had to spend an excessive amount of money on school fees. Now seems like an ideal time to mention the only thing one thing that Marylawn has going for it: the tuition is pocket change compared some other local schools like Newark Academy or Oak Knoll, where all expenses for the academic school year amount to about $30,000! It only makes sense that a price like that should come with room and board and health care. All this goes to show that private schools should be abolished. There is absolutely no need for them; they’re comparable to laundromats in a nudist colony – superfluous. Marylawn is no better than public schools. The students still cheat on exams, cut class, argue, curse at teachers, and start physical altercations. This proves that these students are not made of a better quality of moral fiber than their public school counterparts. The average SAT for the graduating class is lower than the local public high school, Columbia. Someone should come and nail a modern day parallel to Martin Luther’s 95 Theses to Marylawn’s doors. In conclusion, private schools are not what people think they are. They are supposed to have a better social environment, to be safer, and to make the students smarter. Do they really do that? As stated, parents pour money into these schools, and they are not very effective. Private schools claim that public schools are a scandal. However, who REALLY is the scandal?|::::|Don t improve! This was fantastic! Good Job. I liked how u put your point of view in this it really makes stand out.